While it is visually appealing that you use images, I think they need a little bit more explanation at points. Also, why is the "Create Jobs for USA Program" on your map? I haven't read your paper, so I don't know if that clarifies it, but I don't understand if it is associated with a particular location in the middle of the US or if it's like just saying generally about the US this policy? I like that your green lines list the country and the number of retail locations, that is really clear in what your trying to communicate. You might want to mention what is being sourced on all of the red lines, like what comes from Africa Arabia? Also, in including so much information from their website, quotes and images, you explain these some of the time (like in the Mexico case) but not all of the time (Ethos water). Spell out why that is important to your map.
Overall, really clear presentation, and beautiful to look at which I think brings people in to actually read all the information you have creatively shown. I would say don't try to change your map in any fundamental way, but just explain a few points more thoroughly and make it clear how they all interconnect to the argument of your paper or the story that you are trying to tell here (Which I think is about Jobs?)
While it is visually appealing that you use images, I think they need a little bit more explanation at points. Also, why is the "Create Jobs for USA Program" on your map? I haven't read your paper, so I don't know if that clarifies it, but I don't understand if it is associated with a particular location in the middle of the US or if it's like just saying generally about the US this policy?
ReplyDeleteI like that your green lines list the country and the number of retail locations, that is really clear in what your trying to communicate.
You might want to mention what is being sourced on all of the red lines, like what comes from Africa Arabia?
Also, in including so much information from their website, quotes and images, you explain these some of the time (like in the Mexico case) but not all of the time (Ethos water). Spell out why that is important to your map.
Overall, really clear presentation, and beautiful to look at which I think brings people in to actually read all the information you have creatively shown. I would say don't try to change your map in any fundamental way, but just explain a few points more thoroughly and make it clear how they all interconnect to the argument of your paper or the story that you are trying to tell here (Which I think is about Jobs?)
-Kesley Price